幫我汁汁- - 作文...

...check carefully about grammar   a lot of errors
and remember chinese phrase like 發陽光大...cannot just translated into english
e.g. "So, if he does not have thestrong body"....  can be simply "if he is not strong enough"

"So, I would like to talk about the importance of linkboy first. Than,let see the benefit of using sportsman. And at the end, you will know the reasonabout my opinion which is very important."
this is no need